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Tuesday, 8 August 2017

At the wave pools.



I think I needed to work on descriptive language and making better words for my recount.


  AT THE WAVE POOLS.
When we got to the pools I was so excited that I couldn't believe my eyes,I couldn't wait to get on the slides. Me my Dad, Mum Sweyde, my sister,  cousin, uncle and my aunty  rushed out of the car like we were the flash. I couldn’t wait to get into the pool I sprinted as fast as I could to the changing room I slipped my clothes on and ready to go for and swim.


I was filled with joy and happiness went through my bones  I was running to the water. I quickly jump before my brother and sister jumped in. It was so nice and fresh that I could stay in there for ever the water slides was not open but it was going to open in a few minutes later, so we were just splashing the water as high as we can, SPLASH SPLASH SPLASH !!!. the people on the ladder said we're opening in 5 minutes, for the water slide.


I dashed to the warm pool when I jumped in the warm pool I was like yes. The people yelled out the water slide was open I was like to my Dad can I he said just go I was and little scared to walk up but I SLOWLY WALKED UP !!!. I was looking through the ladder when you walk up way down I was saying to myself don’t look down.


When we got to the top the lifeguard said one at a time. I was trying to jump all the way to the back but I couldn’t because I was next. I jumped into the light slide because I couldn’t  see anything I was going down like and slippery snake doing and snake roll .when I went down It was pretty fun that I was going down it again so I jumped into the Dark slide and my brother was just at the back of me. I yelled THIS IS THE FASTEST SLIDE !!! and I CAN’T SEE ANYTHING !!! so when we got to the bottom my Mum lets go now. Have you had  a lot of fun mum said and I replied yes.

I thought that day was fun and a little bit scary. I will never forget that day and how fun the slides were and the warm pool.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Sonny,
    how has your day been? my name is Maya and I go to papakura central school. I loved your writing It was very nice I liked the bit when you said happiness went through my bones it was very poetic. keep it up. I could´t find anything bad about your writing.
    bye,

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  2. Hey Sonny,
    My name is Shabeera and I'm from Waikowhai Primary school. I really like your writing named "At the wave pools." I think your writing was really interesting and fun to read. I really, really love how you said "happiness went through my bones" because it's a really descriptive sentence. Maybe next time you could look over your sentences so it makes more sense. If you would like to see my learning blog, here it is http://wpsshabeeraa.blogspot.co.nz/

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