A Proud Day

here is my writing and here are my two writing goals that I have set: Use capital letters and fullstops in the right pace

and use figurative language

Fishing at Opononi

This is my story about my  first trevally I caught at Opononi. we all arrived at Opononi. i was with Myer my Dad Mum Sweyde and shilane said are we there yet i shouted me and my dad got  my fishing rod untangle because my uncle gave it like that so my dad finally done it I.

I  said to dad i can't wait to caught and fish.

Me and my dad went over to the wharf throw our line out to then and few minutes later my dad was standing on the side of the wharf  then he dropped his jandal he gave his fishing rod to Shilane and i gave my rod to Myer took my pants off and my T shirt off then jumped in the salt water it was so freezing like  then the water went straight up my nose then through my eyes it was so sore   i quickly climbed back t it was so cold .later on then my dad got his jandle.

And few minutes later there was some people came over to the wharf to have and fish.I felt my rod tugging it was pulling me back and forwards like I was on and bull rocking back and forward.some people said  go boy

so i pull it back then reel it in. my dad done the rest he reel it in heaps of people look down when he was reeling it up he said it was and trevally i took it over to the truck and  my mum took and photo.

I thought that was the coolest day at the beach. here is and photo of my fish up the top.